aight I liked this piece... it's not a regular subject and that makes it interesting.
Your beginning spoke to me, so I just had to read further, where you with your words, kept my interest.

"Let us give so children might live our life and our mind"

I thought you were going to give some hopefull line right there, but as it seems, the last line came out negative. I kinda liked that...
I'd give this piece a 9/10
really nice work, great flow, vocab, wordplay
keep it up

peace