aight dawg, this was a good piece,... something more for an audio though.
keep elevating on your vocab though.
there were lines where it didn't worked like

'All of a sudden they dont think i'm whack no mo
After they munched all my shit, i showed 'em to do''

but anywayz, nice piece, keep elevating and try to take it to audio
I'd give the piece 8/10
keep dropping shit like this