Very eloquent verse you have there...
I felt at times you tried too hard with your vocabulary.
"Myocardial tissue", you could have just said heart and gotten a more impactful meaning.
There's a fine line between complexity and WTF?
But aside from that you had a very nice and powerful verse about our battles in here and how that stretches outside of rap and music cuz words hurt and heal everywhere.
7.5 possibly 8 out of 10.
Now you read mine...
Thank you...
Don't forget to click the link afterwards.