this was pretty good..flow was nice..multis were good..content was ight..topic was kinda different..need to work on ya grammar tho..a few lines were.......and dnt put words just for flows sake..
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Had a heart of gold with advice for every person; pure
The lure had hooked millions, situation worsened; cured.
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like that..pure..cured..seemed like u did it for flows sake..or ur supposed to pause before u say it..which slows the flow down..make n it irrelevant..
other than that..not bad..worth the read..