jeez.. u guys are dickrode SOOOOO bad.


this was ok...but mediocre i would have to say.

my reasons? well. . .

it was kinda siplistic rhyme scheme, u havnt used many poetic techniques to gain the readers empathy.

for example

"Instead found myself in the bed.....wit bruises from rocks in a sock"
there was soooo much more that could be done here. u could have created an imagery for the bruising to allow the read to feel where ur coming from. instead u just said it.

with 13ths piece it just seems like u was listin a loada bad shit what happened to ya. u had that "crown of thorns" shit goin on... but to be honest its played.

"Give it help and support crooked plant wont go wrong"

sorry yo.. but what the fuck is that. it dont even make sense. was crooked the best word u could have used?? help n support? c'mon man, make me think.

well it appears u guys are rode WAY to hard. as for the piece, it seemed more like a check list rather than an explanation. i'm feelin the topic but the vocab use was dispicable.


no hate tho, just my opinions