Mmk I tried to reply last night but my computer was being so friendly and after I quoted you for the second time it froze... here we go again:
I agreed with Proph about that whole "this is me" statement you have but I also got that you're through bein mr. Nice guy because it's gotten you no where, or it's tired you out... Which I think everyone knows how that feels (if I'm wrong I'm wrong I know you're a lot deeper than I am so I understand that I may misinterprate your writing) I liked the sarcastic tone you seemed to have durring this, and then the last part you just seemed to full on let loose your agressions without masking them in anything. Again you have portraied emotion and writting skills in another peice (and written it so well that not all can understand) You speak in rythm and riddles in this peice it seemed to me. But it was good because it didn't let you just read it, you had to think to know what you're talking about. Normally I go through a peice and try to pick out the one line that jumped out at me, in this there were many but my favorite by far was:
"My thoughts run along outside their houses carrying
On provoking conversations knockin patience..."
The average person wouldn't think to personify their thoughts, and the very fact that not only you did but that you created a stencil of imagry where the reader could fill in what their mind saw speaks wonders of you. I loved that line, I went back and re read it because that was a very creative idea. My other favorite line was: "Mostly unusual at times like a child with both parents" I was wowed by that line, because that is true and you just spit it out... no worries, and it was good. I liked ya peice, sorry if I've said anything to offend ya, an if ya need to talk about somethin that's got you upset then you can always talk to me bud... amazing drop, peace