some people are capable of typing more than
just a sentence jes..youll see...this was a
decent start and you used good
adjectives such as "tastefully sweet"

standing patiently by the hour while hastily running out of time
many quick to speak,

your flow picked up there and this could have been streached
out into a verse...something rhyming with speak...more story*

overall this was a nice piece...nothing to critique