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Old 08-16-03, 10:57 PM   #8
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From: murdaland
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anti-heros flow was right on, complex but works good if you can fuckin read. i didnt understand some of his shit didnt rhyme like the very end. and pro tools iono if that was supposed to rhyme with i smoke you. if it is you gotta emphasize. im not a textcee but i think you use quotation marks around wordplay and use capital letters to show that something partway through a line rhymes with something at the end. i think what would improve your shit is if you led up to a punch and then skipped a line and started the next part. it would emphasize the shit.

condom king has an excuse for a simple boring flow cuz hes a newb. his one personal made no sense, marble ebonics? ebony is also a type of wood so you coulda used that for wordplay but i realize it wouldnt have fitted. but if you gonna have a simplistic ass flow, you gotta come hard. you gotta make up for it by usin complex words na mean.

vote anti-hero

peace
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