This was pretty good.

From a writers standpoint i can appreciate the effort and emotion put into this due to doubting this is yalls true emotions..If that's the case then it's alot harder to stepo outside the box and write from anothers veiw points..

I give it overall a 7/10...

Which is good coming from me..Basically because the content..The rest was a lackluster..I felt 13th desciple had the better ontent while bribe brought better flow with exceptionally nice content..

Wordplay? ..0/10...Kind of hurts you...Even tho i know the piece isn't meant for wordplay and things of the sort...And you don't really have to have it...It does show a good ammount of growth and elevation due to the creativity it takes to transform words into play when it's dealing with emotional/real shit..

I don't know if yall will like the critique..But this is how i feel...

Keep writing..1ne