The basis of the idea seemed good enough.

But you controlled the emotinos too much when they shouldn't have been. And then at times allowed emotions to get the better of the way you put parts together.

Also didn't seem compressed enough. Loose and untidy. Yet the raw effect that can sometimes bring, didn't come off too well.

I could see the emotion in it, it was bursting to get out. But you didn't quite release it often enough.

...resp...

PS

Necro - could the woman be the universe, and god be the man injecting life into it. Universe gives birth?! Heh....(!)...