This is poetry.

The emotions pure yet not so much that they slip right through.

The imagery powerful and evocative, vivid yet also with a certain subtelty.

The vocab varying and well used, keeping the reader, er... reading (heh).

The way you put it together, constructed if you would, done with a certain loose precision. So it is compressed, yet not not totally. Good effect.

The essence floated through the air providing a real atmosphere to the piece.

Oh, and welcome back Soultress..(!).

You've come back with a fine, fine piece of poetry. That's the way i felt best going about commenting on your piece. Though much more could and will be said.

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