I'm pumped, i'm ready
fists clenched, standin steady
gettin pissed off already
face is sweaty
i'm nervous
but on the surface, i look pissed and ready
to fight,
i know it's not right
but i don't give a fuck
you fuckin suck
buddy....i'm gonna fuck you up!

You used the same words over and over again and this was way off for the lose yourself beat. You did try and use the rhyme scheme but I feel you fell short. I'm not gonna say anything stupid like "elevate son" or "you suck" since you said you found this in your rhyme book and forgot you had it look at it as a shining example of how much better you are or can be. 1