Aight check it...

"Nothin' is proven" from a crush cuz love is abusive
From the brush of a tongue to the touch when it's movin'
Such an illusive hunt for somethin' exclusive
But when ya lose n ya hunt for loves anotha illusion
I'm like fuck it..it's stupid cuz still "Nothin' is proven"
Maybe trust is the loose ends to adjust and improve in
Rushin' into this lust i was flushed with confusion
Now i live day out by the grudge that i've grew with

Nothin-is-proven/love-is-abusive/Touch-when-it's-movin'/Such-an-Illusive/Somethin-exclusive/But-when-Ya-Lose-n/Anotha-Illusion/
Fuck-it-it's-stupid/Nothin'-is-proven/Trust-is-the-loose-end/Adjust-and-Improve-In/Rushin-into-this/Flushed-with-confusion/Grudge-that-it-grew-with....That's alot of multis..See them now@word?..This is more advanced style of multi tho, i wouldn't worry about that because you keep the inner rhyme scheme and the multi in the same sequence...But yeah..You see the multis now right?..Flow's beautiful to me, the hard thing isn't the multi tho..It's keeping a solid content while using the multi correctly..Which i think i did..But that's not for me myself to decide..Lets go further down..



Struggle with music but i'm moldin' my marks
Hopin' ta start closin' these holes in my heart
Which open the scars that grow-with my soul in the dark
Lost in the sky at night cuz i cope with the stars

Struggle with music=A multi from the last line sequence..It';s called bar transitions..It ables you to cross o the next line with a smooth flow..Sometimes flawlessly then go str8 itno the next multi...Aight now check the inner rhyme scheme on this one..Which will make your multis and flow so much smoother..
--Moldin-my-marks/Hopin'-ta-start---((Closin'-these-Holes-in-my-heart))--Open-the-scars ((Grow-with-my-soul-in-the-dark))..Then
a small inner rhyme scheme with /Sky/Night/ followed my the multi Cope-with-the-stars...It's not really that difficult but you must know how to use syllable count...And how to build and inner rhyme scheme..

Like..Knowin' it's hard havin a beauty so divine
Yet so far away noone will truely know The shine
I'm broke inside so i fold back n close my eyes
Put my heart in my throat then i spoke it's lies.

This is more simple multis..Beauty-so-divine/Truely-know-the-shine..Then down even simpler with..Broke-inside/close-my-eyes/spoke-it's-lies..And a small inner rhyme scheme again..Very tiny..

Choked on life but now i'm finally admittin' it
If only fools rush in..Title me the idiot
Tired of the little shit, my Faith's on E
I'll just live life under the game cuz the game's on me
P.S....Stay cold, pEacE

This is the simplest part of the verse...Finally-admittin-it/Title-me-the-idiot..Tired of the little shit, transitions it with a slant rhyme..Then Faith's-on-E/Game's-On-Me...Extremely simple multi..No inner rhyme scheme..


So there it is..I guess seeing as how i broke it down i'll critique myself as well..

Some parts i tried to force my multis in there and it may have took a little away from my content..The complexity level was low..I need to use slightly better vocab..My concept wasn't really outspoken do to content jumping towards the end..I ended on a different note than i began..Which isn't good..

Bare in mind it's a key tho..

When we get this collab down@WORD..It'll be hott..

1ne..Hope i helped a little..