Yeah, flow and vocab were easily this pieces strong points, its a shame it was wasted over a no-show but ehhhh, shjit happens you know? Your opener was pretty nice, good descriptions and held my concentration nicely, flow got a little sketchy toward the body of the verse, but not too much.
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The matter of life, pain and perserverence that others seem to lead
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^ My fave. l;ine from this piece, it was just worded pretty dopely and easily stood out as i read it, only real flaw was its length, you should of made it longer to get more indepth with the topic, but still, not bad my man. : )