Shiznit's Thoughts:
As i was reading this...the scene from FRIENDS came across my mind where Joey and Chandler were having a fight Chandler was facing the window as the rain pouring down the glass and Joey did the same but yet in a funny way. (dont ask!)
Control over words combination inspired me on this piece. You've compiled and matched the words used perfectly. Terms used required guts and strength to be well expressed and youve made it easy at some point.
The structure of the whole poem gave the ideas implemented very well thought out. The emotions put in it were brilliant.
"Taken from me to suddenly, I cry for the last storm you brought forth on my request
And I pray that one day soon, my lord will return me to the rain he stole from me today"
^^The Ending gave the right direction for it. The fact that "rain" was used as a metaphor for something that uve lost made it stood out more. Brilliant. Nicely done.
-I admit that my addiction of Rain itself teased me to read this poem.
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