Help me father, because I committed a sin
And I don't know with which of seven should I begin
I searched for guidance, but didn't knew where to look
I got stuck between the chapters while reading the holy book
I guessed the right ideas, choose the wrong facts
Started on the right road, but got deceived off the correct track
It seemed self explanatory, but I had to figure it out
But eventually I have to thank you lord, for showing me the rightcheous route--this is a sicc verse man. i like the idea of ending this type of poem with a prayer of sorts. The beginning confused me just a little because i was interpreting it as a conversation between a son and estranged father and once i got to the bottom and read this verse i realized i was right and wrong it is a son and "father" just not the kind i envisioned.

As for the second piece i didn't feel it as much not because it was short but because i felt you forced it a tad. only because it didn't flow naturally me to me it rhymed and followed the criteria for a good flow but something was off to me. Sorry I did thoroughly enjoy the first piece though. 1