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Old 08-21-03, 10:39 AM   #2
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From: HELL!!....and yet you think im jokin
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k first things first hun u gotta name your pieces, its like a mother not naming her child so name it k. i liked this, it read well, but i didnt understand why you threw one paragraph in there with 5 lines. it does seem like u change topics, from do dreams matter, to plagues of thought on your brain, but it sorta ties together. the part that stood out for me was


My purpose is unknown
It's hiding deep within me
Shadowed by uncertaintly
Concealed and buried deeply.

good piece all and all, keep postin
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