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I have to say in response to ^that^ I feel like some peices cannot be named... it creates intregue if some times they are left untitled. It's nothing like a mother not naming her child, no one it really going to need to call on this, it's not alive, it's a thought, that may only be fully understood and fully felt by the writer for some period of time, there for the person who writes it should decide what to name it, not a reader. Untitled sometimes in it self creates the feeling of more than one thought, and more than one name for the peice, or not knowing the words to describe it. Some of my best peices have been untitled and I know that's the reason I clicked on this, because it was untitled. But on to the peice:
I liked the flow in it, like a spoken word poem tho puncutation may not have been there I still knew where to pause, where to start again, and when to let it flow, which demonatrates talent. Random thoughts flowing through your head at the moment maybe? But they were very interesting... kinda like the questions "dared" to be asked. I liked how you incorperated the "Matrix" as well to let the reader into your feelings. Regardless of whether or not this peice fit some poetic mold it was well written, I take it as it is and I'd say good job on it... definatly lookin forward to more of your drops, keep flowin gurly, peace
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