..A New Breed of Femcee..
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Great collabo fellaz.
Everyone brought a crucial aspect to the table, different yet similar in overall themes..
Baron~
"shown notions of better life, the wedded wife, a wealthy man
so now im allowing fate to Lend a Hand to my Self Demands.
my Selfish Plans too Travel Far and Wide, Re-Start my Life
and decorate each Darkened Night w/ a stars Sparkling Light."
Great multi's. Stunning Imagery also.
"Fly doves for symbols of peace, im the symbol of all thats lost,
so i'll burn my Bridges to make sure im never Double Crossed. ."
Nice symbolism and reference to the title...really set the stage for the next couple stanzas. You are an amazing writer.
Clockword~
"My bridge's reduced to ash's,all that remain's are backflash's
Now the only way is forward,Heading the way the wind lash's"
Once again, great flow and picture perfect imagery..especially in this line:
"I've disturbed the god's,.. a storm gather's up in the cloud's
Dark & twisted, should evil prevail, releasing out hell's hound's"
You added a great flair to this collab. Nice writez, no doubt.
Tikki~
"i've burnt bridges to leave all my emotions stranded
and i burnt myself to leave all my memories branded."
Wow..really powerful line there..while the first two verses seemed more focused on the physicality of the "burnt bridges" yours seemed more centered on the emotional half..if that made any sense at all..
"a past i cant escape- a love for heat with deep lashes
and so it ends like the bible- dust to dust- ashes to ashes"
Great way to end the verse..reference to the bible adds to the intensity of the overall feeling of the verse. Nicely done.
AxL~ After the second or third line of this verse..i was like, what the hell does this have to do with anything?? It seemed like you got off topic to me, but maybe it relates in some way I'm just missing..It was a nice verse, good flow and bars, just didnt seem to fit in with the tone of the previous 3 verses...
So Anyway...
Nice collab..Great concept, well executed. Propz to all participants. It was a pleasure to read.
peace.
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