its nice.. with that said... i know a little thing about commercial tracks... You need to work on your delivery.. in underground its important but in commercial it is a nesisty to have good emotion. By the lyrics and beat u chose u need to be more entergetic with it. yell a lil bit. i mean u gotta put some effort in yo vocals... and there is some other stuffi wont get into.. but shit was nice for real.. u got skills...