I dont know when the next tme will be when i see your smilin face//
I look up at the clouds,prayin to god to send you back to your right place//
^^^ I love the imagery you displayed, i can see a smilin face lookin back my memorys thats how deep i perceived it

Your sparkling blue eyes truly blew away all my cloudy days//
without you i wouldnt been able to part the shit and see my way//
^^ your stanzas all start out very strong and finish good

Some ppl dont relise what they rip apart with one simple act//
want to show them all the pain it causes, but im too slow to react//
^^ I can envision your pain throughout the piece

Your fragil mind is too young to possibly take all this hell in//
tryin to find words to put it in but no matter what its always gonna be a sin//
And as you turn around in the back of your car seat to wave good-bye//
i swallow hard, hold my head high, wish you all the best, givin in to all the pain and cry//
^^ strong finish to the piece keep writin and elevatin yourself

pz DF