This was pretty good, you can tell you prolly new to RB but not to writing, your vocab is your strongest assest here, not the fact that you using alot of words but the fact that they make sence. I get the feel that if this is not a keystyle type thing then you just typed this down right at the computer without pre-writting becasue it really has no common topic thru-out, but It's pretty good.

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