been reading any of 2pac's poems latley? the rose that grew from concret? i liked how you took his idea in the end but turned it around, made it a tad depressing, but if its what your feeling its what your feeling.

my beatiful insides locked under everyday life

liked this line, and i feel it, i can relate to it.
i know you put forth to have some emotion in this piece but it didnt come throu very strong i felt it in some places but not enough, keep writing from the heart and dont be afraid to explore yourself trying seeing things in a different light

all and all this was a pretty good piece keep them coming for me

~Tera~
DONT HATE

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