Born to kill was being kind in his comment, something most people here on RB are not, Kind! You really need to tighten up your ryhme structure, and elevate your vocab. Your drop was so simplistic it was hard to read thru the end. Yeah you had some ryhmes but that's not enough. Use some complexity to get your message across, hide your meaning in the verbage, so that the reader has to think harder. You need to work on that elevation, I know since your new, you might take my advice as a diss, but it is not. I am simply detailing some improvemnts you can make. Peep some of the drops on this site, cuz some cat's here are really Ill. I mean there are alot of talented people here, you can really learn from thier examples. I have been taking thier critiques and applying it in my own work. Keep elevating...

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