verse 1.. good flow.. I could see some newb style mixed with a more intermediate style with some of the way it was set up.. alright stuff though.. it went from good in the starting and kinda fell off lyrics wise to the sorta newb style after the middle and I wasn't feelin' u using those first 2 bars at the beginning AND end.. sorta didn't fit to me, but alright...

verse 2: sorta the same thing.. came good at the beginning and became newbish in the middle:
"tell yah lyrics went bazurk fagget cat dick sucker you rather wear a damn skirt/".. wasn't feeling all of the namse and stuff.. just sorta took away from the piece.. but I thought the ending was tight and probably the best part of ya verse..

i see now that the repeating part is a type of chorus and it's alright for a chorus, but might have been misplaced into the whole drop cuz it doesn't really go, to me.. but good stuff..

keep elevating..

-Ie