Played and Basic.................not to mention fake. You showed some signs of talent, don't get me wrong just stop fronting and be yourself. For example.............

He locked in a coffin, so now im stackin double figas often, 24’s flossin cash,
Taken you to school, on the court or in a dule, youll be made to look like a fool,----this is a figment of your imagination, I know this because you were trying to hard, ease up.

Blowin hydro from my lungs, turnin black as night, more lethal wit the mic than p diddy,----this here isn't hard to do, be nicer on a mic than P-diddy that is.

Im meaner than the streets of Harlem, Sittin down on top the city,
The only way to survive is to be sly n whitty,
Government can kiss the grass, paying taxes, not in my vicinity,----so that I'm not completely down on you.....this right here was tight good vocab nice flow didn't sound forced well constructed and all.


Overall I'd say elevate, the way you can do that is be yourself, no one likes an internet thug or a studio gangsta. If you don't believe me look at Ja Rule.......I'm not comparing the two of you, I'm just saying be yourself and don't force it so much. 1