Rhyming/Flow
Your Flow Was A Little Off, But For The Best Part It Was Average. I Think The First, Fifth n' Sixth Stanza's Were Good, Flowed O.k, Nothing Special Though....6/10

Vocab/Wordplay
The Vocab Was Lacking Here, You Need To Elevate On That, But I Liked These Bars:
"Like the neck of a stranger wont even put up a fight
He's as blind as a rat whose been incarcerated out dated
Don't even now that I'm behind him wit a blade serated" - Nice Start....7/10

Concept/Topic
A Nice Topic, You Gonna Be A Good StoryTeller When You Elevate. You PLayed This OUt pretty Well, Good Emotion Here, LInes LIke:
But it's to late I've just sent God another SOUL tonight - Really Showed Your Ability,You never Fell Off The Topic Either .. 8/10

Overall
7/10, NIce, Your Gonna Be Dope Here Soon, Just Keep At It And Elevate

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