1 reply out of 20 looks isnt it awful!!
so ima make it two for ya

i liked this it was clean cut and simple, got its point across, and like Content said its hard to critiqe something like this.

your vocab was good and your flow was there

i found that sometimes i was asking for a few more lines inbetween to tell more of the story, especially in between lines 3 and 4

you kept emotion though out the whole piece which is good.

but like mentioned you need more imangery, it would take it that much farther, dont be afraid of searching new places inside you that u might not even know are there

all and all i liked it, it was a good drop. welcome to RB by the way

keep droppin more i'll make sure to check them out and actually leave a message LOVE

~Tera~
DONT HATE

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