I wasn't feeling it man, for real... thas an opinion...
it ain't garbage or nothing... but I couldn't find interest...
shit got me tired after the first few lines... but I kept at it... read the whole thing...
like my man said, this is pretty basic... the rhymes were mad simple... I didn't see no rhythm, you need to work on that flow...
and yo, I think this was your worst line "more lethal wit the mic than p diddy" what! lol... ah man... but check it, I ain't hatin', just telling you what I thought about the verse...

Peace