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Old 08-28-03, 08:32 PM   #2
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From: Tha heart of tha devil
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To bring down, spit on, and stab in the back with a knife

u may want to change this line it didn't fit i don't think but tha rest flowed decently, it was basic wit wordplay but i don't care much for that, work on tha ending, that's suppose to be tha strongest part of a rap, tha thing that says "NOW WAT!"

good though, it was aight
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