Honestly, Some parts of this shit were pretty good...You seem to know about internals:

"still i'm ready to drop a rhyme like murder ain't a crime"

And These 2 bars:
"I rhyme with diction, and this ain't fiction i'm dipictin'
So don't be so quick to be dismissin', the words that I'm spittin'
I know you feel this shit despite it bein' written" - Were Dope!

It Kind of fell off towards the end, but what i pointed out shows a shit load of potential, even if it takes painstaking months to really show it, it will be worth it in the end!

Keep Droppin' Them!