This was a hot poem you started off good and came dope through the whole piece nice job here are the lines i liked the most off ya verse..
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fuck my last bar the cold chrome is heaven the trigger is dipped in the reverse~
i read verse-es and as i cross the desert of truth i stop treading and plead thirst~
that was merely mediocre hold a poker facer as im swarmin the block~
my holster tastes of souls taken without a warnin i drop~
pain has struck again in the form of my fallen wife~
my heart slows its beat as i retreat rather then stand tall in strife~
FUCK MY LAST BAR rage grips my mental strings and plays a gangsta tune~
a melody of tombstones and bones of heaven's ghetto but no slang to use~
u know the drill my mic meditation is mettled in mediocrity~
toppin me and being you leaves u etched in hypocrisy~
but as a sidenote my pain did i mention my love, beat without a heart?~
love lost and as my seems seperate my life just comes apart~
but simplicty strikes my dome no longer am i in fear of us being estranged~
i see the reflection of ecstatic rage as i peer into the window of pain~
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Tight...
Keep it coming..