I checked it... shit was pretty good man... I wasn't feeling that little hook, but the verses were cool...
I like that style, shit's almost like a run-on sentence the way you wrote it, and it flows all the way throught... some parts felt a bit like tounge twisters and shit... that was aight... though some people ain't gon' feel the way you writing... yo know... no bars or nothing... might get a bit complicated for some to read.... thas all....

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