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Old 09-01-03, 04:56 PM   #11
Rappad
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ok ill break this down
Flow:Both were choppy but NARD took this
Metas:tie
Vocab:tie
Multies:NARD
Punches:NARD
Structure:NARD
Wordplay:NARD
Personals:tie
Creativity:tie
Enjoyment:tie
Complexity:tie


Crip's verse
yo, dickride so many niggaz its like you connected at the testicle.
spittin so many weak lines its hysterical. nigga, my ~murderous method~ will ~shake ya fast~ like ~mystikal~
i ain't gotta talk bout usin guns to kill ya. my punches
alone will putcha on da floor fasta than a blast from chrome 4-4
mad cuz my ~words are weapons~. thought u could kill me
wit a pussy ~smith and wesson~
i've merked you lyrically, if you bite my lines, i'll track you down and physically teach you a lesson.

^^your whole structure was messed up, thus causing your flow to be choppy, i lost you at times. If that's the case, you need nice punches to back it up, which you didn't have.

Nard's verse
I'm stalkin Cripwalkin, break his mouth to stop his trash talkin,
you're nothin within, you're more artificial than Barbie or Ken/
^^FLOW WAS BAD HERE, PUNCH WAS NOT TOO LAME BUT KINDA PLAYED AND DIDN'T HIT TOO HARD.
This battle will be your first defeat that will continually repeat,
take a seat, you're as soft as fresh concrete drying in the heat/
YOUR BEST LINES IN HE VERSE IN MY OPINION, GOOD USE OF MUTI'S PLUS IT FLOWED WELL, AND HIT KINDA HARD.
How you gonna say you'll merk a genius at work, Crip's berserk,
you couldn't figure my shit out if you worked as a store clerk/
^^GOOD FLOW, PUNCH WAS BAD.
You call your words weapons, well they must be fire'n blanks,
Damn dogg i thought it was April, the way you be pullin pranks/
^^PRETTY DECENT PUNCH, FAIRLY GOOD LINE, KINDA HIT HARD.
This site is for rap battles so why'd you even become a member,
I can see the future and you still won't have a win by December/
^^PRETTY BAD FINISHER, BUT COULD HAVE BEEN WORSE.

See, NARD's verse was structured well, thus enabling me to break it down like that. He had better flow, punches, and wordplay. Both of you gotta elevate. No hate and props to both.

Vote=NARD

And that, my friends, is word.