Fundamentalz. the flow of your verse was aight. it could use some help tho. Your disses were creative, but they didnt stand
out Much. Vocab was Ok.

You live in a SHACK, that's why you're such a "tool"
Throw a textbook at me, only way im gettin "schooled"


LoL. this line is Played in all Posistions. (ways). This Punch could have been Better. The set-up for the Punch was Ok, creative.
I liked it, but the Text-Book/Schooled thing. Naw.

It's a SHAME, you hafta come round here and i hafta jaw ya'
Just because you on my nuts doesnt mean you a "balla"

that was your best line In my opinion. Nice.
Over-all that was a Good verse, but it could have
been better worded.
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Skam. I liked your 1rst verse just slightly over the 2nd.
even tho you Fed off his verse, those punches were
somewhat peronals bout his verse.

N-E way. your REAL verse needs some work. You dont
necessarily need Vocab or Multies. which you lacked anyway
in that peticular Flow. The battles On punches and Ryme Scheme.
at least for Text in my opinion. Your 1rst few lines were your Best, then it seemed that you just dropped out of the Battle.
Keep posting and Elevating.


Vote-Fundz

Fuck Sleepers!

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