Flow started off good but then you lost it mid way hrough, thats due to the bar lengths changing, you need to keep the roughly the same length syllable wise to sustain the flow. Content was its strong point, a few lines were nicely worded such as the 'Front of the blunt' line, there's not really a lot more to say on this piece, go and write one to a set topic and make it longer, something roughly 20 lines, then we'll see what you can do a little better. .