*breathes in*
ok here we go
the flow was easy to find, and while reading it i made a stupid little beat in my head and it worked well... its a modification of Frontin' by the neptunes... anyways

Cuz Heres Your Last Chance To Get On Your Knees
Bitch Please Want A Piece Better Suck On These

easily the most played line i ever heard.. try to not use that one again.. besides that the originality was there and the approach was good 2.

the vocab could have been better... try to get a few more syllabulls per wor.. i think on average u had 3 syls as the highest.

other than that i liked it... 8/10

that that how you want