yo!.... sup man....
damm this shit brings back memories...
thas about the time I wrote this piece I called "Broken", posted it here on rapbattle... don't know if you ever read it...
Shit man, you know I can relate to this... so cats is saying that the flow was choppy, they right... but I figure your reasons... I first calmed down then wrote the piece... you know to construct it better and shit...
I felt this man, it was deep, straight out the heart and shit...
I felt these lines this most man:
"stole my last breath from my chest-what was left was a mess of a man depressed-and stressed- a thousand words paint a picture and each of mine animated my death-"
Shows depth, consistancy, and flow... shit just embodies the whole post... hehehe...

Peace