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Old 09-03-03, 02:58 PM   #11
RythmicTendicies
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THis Was nice, the structure and bar length were a good combination and it showed. I know i'ce critised about your bar length before but here it was tight.

You told a great story-type thing here, it covered a large amount of topics. Alot of good historcal figures,facts etc... However i fell that it could've been spread out into another verse or even 2, ot just seemed a little crunched.

You had killa wordplay n' vocab as usual...loved the following lines:
Demonic spells casting over tha world coz violence sells/,
666 tha mark of the beast and peoples loved ones deceased in Iraq/,
napolean was an evil genius who wanted to dominate the entire nation/
Britain invaded over half tha world and slaughtered natives without hesitation/
- hott

Overall: 8/10, some bits could have been improved, but you showed a great amount of skill here. Keep it up dawg!
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