aight, u gotta either have a rhyme scheme or not... u kept switchin, in tha type of poem u did u can't do that, it won't sound right and it didn't sound right here niether, as a poem, it wasn't deep enough and i didn't feel like it was a poem, more of a quick off tha mind rap, (not a freestyle) jus keep droppin and elevate and u'll find ur own style...

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