yor talking over a beat....thats not rapping, you have no delivery, your doing some wierd shit with your voice for it to "sound good" i guess, which its not, your lyrics are very basic....and your quality is real bad....

start over....stop doing that shit with your oice...you dont sound scary, try to spit more fluidly...instead of sounding like you are reading directly of a piece of paper, and simply giving a speach

is that better

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