i see this as a poem, couldn't really make it into a rap because it didn't have a hip hop or rap vibe to it, jus my opinion, as a rap though, u seemed to have tried to hard to make ur multi's, when u do that ur just droppin some nonsense words in there, but everything else was aight, hit ur head on a cloud, naomean?...

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