A piece that with simplicity really brought forward the emotions well. Not over elaborating too much or over complicating things. You made each stanza stand fairly strong.,

You know, you have a very similar style writing to your sister. Apart from the capitals. The use of '!', the structure of stanzas and lines..and basically, how you write in general. But especially the use of '!'. That's interesting...

Anyway, nice piece. Emotional in a fairly 'pure' (or raw) sense.