hey philo,

im glad you comented. thanks for the props about it being from the heart. its the only way i know.

i can see where a lot of it, to you
sounds like just a bunch of crap, or ramdom things you dont understand.

but everything in there is very deliberate i assure you. and was not completed in hast.

if you knew me or my shit
(which i neither expected you too or fault you for not)
but if you did, you would know i often write about nature and stuff. and its been said some sounds like its from the nature channel, hence the line in my peice.


here is one of the short ones as an example...

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Between mountain peaks, where blue pristine creeks
Weave below a sea, of spruce green trees

Across vast canons passes, that entrap massive size rapids
thrashing secrete water falls, complete this scene with calm action

All beneath eyes of an eagle, Circling high in the breezes
Hopeful this guy in his cabin, Will provide him some salmon
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my other stuff sound like nursery rhymes, tongue twisters. you get the picture.

anyway, i joded down the structure. five sylable combos dont just flow outa my pen with out some deep thought. but thats just me.


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some might.........my...................influence
tongue tie............lines.................Doc-ta. seuss

post...................metaphores........sake..... .....amusment
float...................outdoors.............natur e........veiwing

every............................................. ..................cleanly
never............................................. ..................meaning

snaking seamless streams..........fluid themes.............repeatedly
making pleasing clean.....................rotines................. .stinkin easy

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plus the center rhymed words inside each sentence itself. like "topics in step wit" or "seamless streams of E’s"

i thought bouncing "clean" off "stinkin" down at the other side of the sentence in that one line, was kinda a clever play on words.

oh, well......thanks for not hating.

peace