I really liked the unexpected turns in this piece, I never knew what was coming up next. And your word play was really good at certain places, your use of the words really put the confusion and imagery out there..

i welcome the end of the fall,

have i really hit the ground?
am I really standing still?

I really liked these lines... and I love the ending-

I've finally hit the ground,
and was never asleep,
but now i can rest,
in the deepest of sleeps.

Interesting piece.

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