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Originally posted by StreeTLegenD
***My Verse***
Releasing-Tha-Flame -Like I Was The Head Of A 'Band Of Nintendos' The Way Im 'Leading-Tha-Game'//
Preaching-Yah-Fate -'Knock You Out' So Hard Gotchu 'Moving Away' Seeing Your 'Leaving-This-State'//(Unconscious)
Swiftly-I-Drop Wakk MC's -Your 'Fly' Lyrics Become 'Limp' When You 'Cum With Feathers' -When You 'Hit-Me-Its-Soft'//
Your Dissing-Is-Not Ill -All Your Doing Is Playing A 'Clock On A Broken Bulb' Cuz Your 'Ticking-Me-Off'//
Your A Fagget Get Off My Dick, Little Bastard Your 'Jacking Off To Pics Of Cows' The Way Your 'Beefing-Online'//
Trash-This Rascal Leave You Absent At Class, Cant Come At Me-Puberty..You'll Receive-It-Sometime//
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Your opening was alright, at least it wasn't the same basic scheme you see through out the rest of your verse. Your second bar, changes style but kind of loses it because this punch had way to much filler. the last punch was okay.
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[i] Originally posted by Tonya
I'm I battlin A Street Legend dam I ask
who-is-this// as far as {W}rappin you gonna come out
EMPTY HANDED like a lonely BUM-ON-CHRISTMAS//
I'ma Heavy Hitter, you Buntin, so get your REP UP// afta
this loss JACKIN-YA-DICK can't help you keep
ya HEAD UP//
now I got you Thinkin SPANISH, you wanna
RUN-WIT-THA-BULLS// you ROCK BOTTOM & can't
escape so call him PITTiful//
tha Talk of your Town is me and ya crew asking
have you Seen Her// as far as you I neva seen a
STREET LEGEND that's was BITCH MADE like he was
MOLDED by NEUTRAGENA//{cosmetics get it}
each drop I come raw like MEAT STOCK// you small dick
like a PeaCOCK// you can't REACH-MY-LEVEL cause
tha FLOOR is where your PEAK STOP//
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you're opener is decent and your second bar was kind of losing it. It didn't really flow together well. The third bar seems forced and the fourth bar was all filler. If you would have come some of it out, it would have been a nice punch. Then ending was okay. Some of your punches I just wasn't feeling.
vote street legend
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