Your Rhymes were some-what simple here, You need to expand your knowledge of complex rhymin syllables and you seem to have a restricted vocab. Liked the way you compared Babylon to your own 'hood', wether you live in the 'hood' our if you live in a $2m house in 'surbs, is not up for debate here.

try to keep your bars relativly the same length, cos the flow as choppy here. Also, try to keep on topic, cos you swaye dback n' forth at some points..

Keep it up, I can see potential here