^everyone in this thread needs to read Cam's "How to Reply" thread. hosers.
Dude, nice piece, could certainly see the emotion in it. The vocab was nicely used, but it disrupted the flow in a couple places.
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Almost Like The Unheard Screams ,From Undisturbed Dreams..
Though It May Shimmer & Gleam, Nothing Can Be As It Seems..
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that bar has perfect flow, decent vocab, and some deep ass metas. Your internal rhyming was off the hook.
oh, and "Exestentialists" and "Swinging Fists" don't rhyme enough to flow. what else is there to say?
great closer, leaves you with something to think on.
Finally, a piece I can get something out of.
good work dood
peace out!