Fo a start these 1st two lines dont rhyme very well if atall....

everything I "write's hot" like I'm a pyro holdin' lighterz-to-felt-tips//
I'ma "smoke" this nigga...watch this "iceberg-get-melted"//(Iceberg420 get it)

dog you ain't "real"...like a telletubbie you "soft-and-pretend"//
you must have "asked to be merked" too many timez cause you got more lossez-than-winz//

So iceberg gets my vote.....

Go vote on my battle with shepney zaney.......