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Old 09-11-03, 10:19 AM   #2
tsheff112
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Yeah, um... Basic rhyme scheme, simple flow, and a bit cloudy as to what the concept really is. Sort of wanders like a Cash Money song, minus all the bullshit about platinum and benzes or whatever. And at the end you said "so as I go into the hook" so where's the hook? Is this the finished product? I know you can come better than this, but keep droppin and you'll get better as you progress.

Laaate.
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